Write On Wednesdays Exercise 20 - Write the words " I thought I saw" at the top of your page. Set a timer for 5 minutes. Write the first words that come into your head after the prompt. Don't take you pen off the page (or fingers off the keyboard). Stop only when the buzzer rings! Do this exercise over and over if you wish. Write beyond 5 minutes if you like, you can link it up as an extra post.
YOU
I thought I saw you pumping gas into your car and my heart leaped.
The way she stood was just like you.
Poor gal probably thought I was a crazy attacker running toward her.
YOu
I thought I saw you at the mall window shopping.
The way she wore her hair was just like you.
I must have looked like a stalker following her from store to store.
You
I thought I saw you pass by our house last week.
That silver car was just like yours.
I must have been insane to run out waving like a maniac.
you
I thought I saw you in my dreams last night.
Your laugh and smile were just like you.
I ran through all those rooms to catch up with you so I could hug you again.
I think I see you everywhere.
I wish it were true.
Ding!
Wow, what a great piece! I love how you can see them everywhere, in everyone.
ReplyDeleteYou're right, ours are very similar. I relate to this easily. Despite my wishing, she never comes back. I like your format and structure of this piece. Well done.
ReplyDeleteI really liked this piece. It was very sad, but well written
ReplyDeleteI wish you would have sent me a warning today...the dream set me off. I had the same one about beck the other day. I miss them so much.
ReplyDeletelove you...
lovely, and sad, and mostly, full of love. Well done.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful and sad and as Naomi has already said, full of love. Very nice piece, it truly feels from the heart.
ReplyDeleteJaimee, I had the same initial reaction as you - I thought I saw a puddy tat!
Gosh, Jaimee, this was incredibly moving.
ReplyDeleteSo, so lovely.
This is lovely as well as being sad at the same time.
ReplyDeleteWe do sometimes see what we long to see.
If only eh?
I love pieces that are flooded with longing. This one is completely relatable. I also love the way you played with the capitals in the word 'you'; at first (when I read "YOu") I thought you had either pressed shift too long or not long enough, but afterwards all became clear. I don't know why, but that way of manipulating not just which words form a sentence but also which format those words appear in gets to me.
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I can relate to this so well. It's so true, the way you describe it.
ReplyDeleteI was going to say - have you read Kerry's post this week? I see she's commented above, they're so similar. So sad and moving.
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