Wednesday, September 14, 2011

Write on Wednesday--The Mighty Mighty Rewrite




Write On Wednesdays
Gill at InkPaperPen is a godsend giving us good prompts to tackle each week. Here's this week's post! Ding!
Write on Wednesday Exercise 14 - The Mighty Mighty Rewrite...

Zanni: I did a workshop with literary author Mj Hyland, who teachers Masters in Creative Writing at Manchester University. She asked us to choose our favourite book, take the first paragraph and then write our own content into the paragraph, keeping the structure, tone, language etc. It's really helpful!

No time limit. Let's keep up the focus on making each word count. Ready? Set? Write!

It doesn't matter if you can't Write on Wednesday...any day is fine!


Harold, you were our big
brother, our uncle, our friend.
We love and miss you
every day.
When he was nearly a grown man, my brother James got his ear badly pierced by a rogue spinner bait. When it healed, and Bubba's fears of never being able to trust Harold in the boat again were assuaged, he seldom let our father's best friend forget about his injury. His left ear lobe wasn't somewhat shorter than his right; when he stood or walked, the back of his head did not gape open, his hearing wasn't damaged. Harold had a sweet heart and tender spot for us, and James just liked to push his buttons. It is my belief that Harold didn't mind either. He was a gentle man. A good man. A man worthy of our love and affection. We all wish he was still here for us to push his buttons.


I modeled that paragraph after the opening paragraph of To Kill a Mockingbird by Harper Lee. I really liked that exercise. I think it added class to my memory. I'll have to try that again. Lord knows, my Bubba has enough injuries to write about. HeeHee!

5 comments:

  1. Loved that you implemented a real story. All in all it was very well written :D
    I read To Kill a Mockingbird almost four years ago so I don't remember it well. It's time for a reread!

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  2. You used one of my all time favorite books to tell about one of my all time favorite people

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  3. The style and tone of this is very reflective of the original. I love that you've written about your dad's friend with such obvious warmth and affection. Lovely :)

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  4. You have caputred the style of "To Kill A Mockingbird" while allowing your voice to be heard. You did a great job.

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  5. You absolutely got the style of the original here. Unbelievable. Quite a quirky tale you have written for us, Jaimee. I love your writing.

    Thanks for the lovely compliment too. I enjoy finding the exercises and get inspired by all of you people joining in with me!

    Gill x

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